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    dots Submission Name: Why Staydots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 604
    Average Vote:    3.5000
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    dotsWhy Staydots
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    This whole life is nothing but a joke
    All my dreams are gone up in smoke
    Looking to the future there is nothing to see
    Because of things that happened, there is nothing left for me


    Nothing good has happened for a year or so
    It really makes me wonder why I shouldnít go
    Why should I stay here and live with all the bad?
    All I have are memories of all the good we had

    Now the good is gone, never to return
    All the pain it brings makes my broken heart burn
    It all came crashing down destroying everything I knew
    All the things that I believed, were they ever true?

    Iím so tired all the time and I donít know why
    Sometimes I canít stay awake, no matter what I try
    When I sleep my dreams are haunted by the past
    Every night I go to sleep hoping itís my lastÖ.




    Submitted on 2009-03-13 08:33:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      iv had thous nights it sucks ass but hay if we grind our theath and just sit through it tomorow will come
    | Posted on 2009-03-21 00:00:00 | by cha | [ Reply to This ]
      emotional rollacoaster meanings. great writing
    | Posted on 2009-03-17 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Good rhyming, very sad that anyone could be so downcast, a work that could be improved if writer aimed at even a simple rhythm and/or syllable counting. Thanks for posting it. Ted.
    | Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      It was good.I will give you that.It was very sad and you could feel the emotion.You used very good imagery and I love that in writting.It wasn`t unclear at all.It was very nicely written.I would have liked it to be longer but, maybe thats just me:D
    | Posted on 2009-03-13 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]


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