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    dots Submission Name: staccato dots
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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Spoken silence
    Under static glow
    My lungs crystallize
    Inhaling fire and ice
    Deep breaths
    We spoke in verse
    Like the prophets
    Blackened china fish bowl
    Holds life like solitude
    I never loved you
    But I did come to admire you




    Submitted on 2009-03-13 17:32:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sorry, I think I might be becoming a bit more like Freud here in my old age ;-)
    | Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is about a sexual affair without deep feelings, commitments, baggage, or strings right?
    | Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this, although a part of me hates the end. :)

    "My lungs crystallize
    Inhaling fire and ice"

    I really like those lines. Good poem!
    | Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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