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staccato


Author: in shadow
ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581 /277 /103
Words: 50
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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staccato


Spoken silence
Under static glow
My lungs crystallize
Inhaling fire and ice
Deep breaths
We spoke in verse
Like the prophets
Blackened china fish bowl
Holds life like solitude
I never loved you
But I did come to admire you




Submitted on 2009-03-13 17:32:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  sorry, I think I might be becoming a bit more like Freud here in my old age ;-)
| Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem is about a sexual affair without deep feelings, commitments, baggage, or strings right?
| Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this, although a part of me hates the end. :)

"My lungs crystallize
Inhaling fire and ice"

I really like those lines. Good poem!
| Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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