Description: i have no punctuation at all in this piece. please help. any other feedback would be helpful too!
thanks rws for your help!
Hurricane Man -------------------------------------------
His hurricane lips were planted
Firm on the coastline of my neck
Tossing curls and waving strands
Nestled under a somber silhouette
That is the storm of him.
I am cornered by his mighty grip
Weighed down by wet violent currents
Pinned by his breath and constrained
His passionate mouth pressed against me.
Hurricane man - handle me hard...
His hurricane lips were planted
Firm on the coastline of my neck
Tossing curls and waving strands
Nestled under a somber silhouette
That is the storm of him.
I am cornered by his mighty grip
Weighed down by wet violent currents
Pinned by his breath and constrained
By his passionate mouth pressed against me.
Hurricane man - handle me hard...
Handle me.
Hard.
I experimented with your work slightly to trim a few phrases. I enjoy this very much, Miss Sindy.
Submission Name: Hurricane Man
