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A Window isn't all you need to Reflect


Author: doppelganger
ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34 /223 /160
Words: 64
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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wooo~
I listen to too much Against Me!


A Window isn't all you need to Reflect



A cigarette in my heart -
I dream.
I lust for honesty -
A violent truth
                     outpouring
In raspy,
     emotional
          foreign
Tongues.

My ears may not comprehend
The tones,
           however,
My heart drinks it up,
                     with eyes closed,
As an etheral absynthe.

May I dissolve?
So that I might awaken
More firm in my beliefs?

Speak to me.




Submitted on 2009-03-14 13:54:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It reads like your more worried about your formating than the actual poetry,sounding like youve had a great epiphany.

I think its a little self-absorbed for the reader to relate.

But its not the worst, "A cigarette in my heart -
I dream." that was a nice line.

Just...the poems a little underwhelming,but I suppose you wanted to get your thoughts out.

-Craig

| Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
  It reads like your more worried about your formating than the actual poetry,sounding like youve had a great epiphany.

I think its a little self-absorbed for the reader to relate.

But its not the worst, "A cigarette in my heart -
I dream." that was a nice line.

Just...the poems a little underwhelming,but I suppose you wanted to get your thoughts out.

-Craig

| Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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