A Window isn't all you need to Reflect

Author: doppelganger ASL Info:    26/f/your brain Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34 /223 /160 Words: 64

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A Window isn't all you need to Reflect

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A cigarette in my heart - I dream. I lust for honesty - A violent truth                      outpouring In raspy,      emotional           foreign Tongues. My ears may not comprehend The tones,            however, My heart drinks it up,                      with eyes closed, As an etheral absynthe. May I dissolve? So that I might awaken More firm in my beliefs? Speak to me.

Submitted on 2009-03-14 13:54:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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It reads like your more worried about your formating than the actual poetry,sounding like youve had a great epiphany. I think its a little self-absorbed for the reader to relate. But its not the worst, "A cigarette in my heart - I dream." that was a nice line. Just...the poems a little underwhelming,but I suppose you wanted to get your thoughts out. -Craig

| Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]

It reads like your more worried about your formating than the actual poetry,sounding like youve had a great epiphany. I think its a little self-absorbed for the reader to relate. But its not the worst, "A cigarette in my heart - I dream." that was a nice line. Just...the poems a little underwhelming,but I suppose you wanted to get your thoughts out. -Craig

| Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]

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