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    dots Submission Name: A Window isn't all you need to Reflectdots
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    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34/223/160
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Window isn't all you need to Reflectdots
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    A cigarette in my heart -
    I dream.
    I lust for honesty -
    A violent truth
                         outpouring
    In raspy,
         emotional
              foreign
    Tongues.

    My ears may not comprehend
    The tones,
               however,
    My heart drinks it up,
                         with eyes closed,
    As an etheral absynthe.

    May I dissolve?
    So that I might awaken
    More firm in my beliefs?

    Speak to me.




    Submitted on 2009-03-14 13:54:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It reads like your more worried about your formating than the actual poetry,sounding like youve had a great epiphany.

    I think its a little self-absorbed for the reader to relate.

    But its not the worst, "A cigarette in my heart -
    I dream." that was a nice line.

    Just...the poems a little underwhelming,but I suppose you wanted to get your thoughts out.

    -Craig

    | Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      It reads like your more worried about your formating than the actual poetry,sounding like youve had a great epiphany.

    I think its a little self-absorbed for the reader to relate.

    But its not the worst, "A cigarette in my heart -
    I dream." that was a nice line.

    Just...the poems a little underwhelming,but I suppose you wanted to get your thoughts out.

    -Craig

    | Posted on 2009-03-14 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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