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    dots Submission Name: Finallydots
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    Author: April1Angel
    ASL Info:    16/Female/NY
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 4/15/12
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 692
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 452



    Description:
       I made a decision to help the both of us, now i just have to get up the courage to tell tell him about it.


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    dotsFinallydots
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    i'm gonna do it
    i've decided
    for him for me
    for us together

    his every words
    jerk the strings
    connected to
    my heart

    pulling ripping
    tearing at my soul
    as he steals
    yet another piece of me

    so i'll do it
    for him
    for me
    for us together




    Submitted on 2009-03-14 22:49:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      But don't do something you'll regret.
    | Posted on 2009-03-17 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmmm...passion drives this poem! Is it love or hate? I do not know but the phrases you use give me a clue, like, pulling, ripping, tearing at my soul...the next line is what keeps me thinking further...steals another piece of you...woah!

    I like how this is short yet entertaining.
    | Posted on 2009-03-17 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
      You tell him and you go, Gal! Today is the first day of the rest of your life, and the journey of 1,000 miles starts with a single step!
    | Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      man, you are the master of short and powerful poems aren't you?
    | Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by silverstars12 | [ Reply to This ]


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