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Submission Name: Finally dots

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Author:	April1Angel
ASL Info:	16/Female/NY
Elite Ratio:	1.8 - 4/15/12
Words:	53

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	692
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	452

Description:
I made a decision to help the both of us, now i just have to get up the courage to tell tell him about it.

Finally

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i'm gonna do it
i've decided
for him for me
for us together

his every words
jerk the strings
connected to
my heart

pulling ripping
tearing at my soul
as he steals
yet another piece of me

so i'll do it
for him
for me
for us together

Submitted on 2009-03-14 22:49:01 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  But don't do something you'll regret.
| Posted on 2009-03-17 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
  Mmmm...passion drives this poem! Is it love or hate? I do not know but the phrases you use give me a clue, like, pulling, ripping, tearing at my soul...the next line is what keeps me thinking further...steals another piece of you...woah!

I like how this is short yet entertaining.
| Posted on 2009-03-17 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
  You tell him and you go, Gal! Today is the first day of the rest of your life, and the journey of 1,000 miles starts with a single step!
| Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  man, you are the master of short and powerful poems aren't you?
| Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by silverstars12 | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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