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    dots Submission Name: Slow Murder.dots

    Author: Kitinthedark
    ASL Info:    13, female, Ohio.
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 279
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 622
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1865

       It's a dark little peice I made while I was very upset at someone who used me as a pawn.

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    dotsSlow Murder.dots

    Shut up,
    Get out of my head,
    I see your inner motivation.
    Stop touching me,
    Go the Hell away Now!
    Don't release my inner demons.
    I swear you're livid,
    Like a vampire,
    biting me in two.
    But no matter how far away you are,
    you just keep messing with me.
    Why in the hell is this so painful?
    You Envy me,
    you're greedy,
    so lusty for what I have.
    I know what you want,
    but you're just using me.
    And now i'm just a cat in heat,
    and I'm trapped in this moving car.
    My cuts are bleeding,
    I don't think my heart's beating.
    You shred away all my skin,
    all my layers of protection.
    Why won't you stay away?
    You're in my head and I can't get rid of you.
    Is it true?
    Am I just for your protection?
    Like any other Bomb or gun?
    But what you need is something I can't give,
    the risks are just to high.
    I'm trapped,
    and I can't run,
    because ther's nowhere left to hide.
    It's like a never ending hall of mirrors,
    look i'm trapped inside.
    Why are you killing me inside?
    I thought I was your one and only resource?
    All that's left is the blackness in the night,
    I feel violated,
    and alone,
    with all this fear inside,
    I left myself to die.
    You were a time bomb,
    and now you've gone off.
    You were an enemy to everyone,
    so why did I think I was the one exception?
    And now that I'm left for dead,
    life was raped away,
    for what I truly was
    A slow murder,
    like tourture,
    But now that's all over.

    Submitted on 2009-03-15 03:00:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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