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    dots Submission Name: Will I Ever Awake?dots

    Author: Indelible_ink
    ASL Info:    20/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.75 - 143/109/25
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       A poem about initial onslaught of pain when losing someone.

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    dotsWill I Ever Awake?dots

    Will I ever awake?
    Iím left to the unknown
    Without my only guide to life
    I cried alone
    In an air that encompassed
    My soul and tightened
    Around till I could not breathe one time
    And now I am enlightened
    Or maybe my brain has lost oxygen
    And I have lost the reason
    To live or die Ė neither seems desirable
    Except death is treason
    To the memory of a lost angel
    That I imagined right here in my state
    My deoxygenated state
    Forever, without a breath, I sit and wait
    While life continues to relegate
    The fathomless possibilities of heartbreak
    Iím here waiting to be shaken awake
    Deliriously yelling to shake
    For someone to shake me out
    Of this nightmarish, ghost-like reality
    That I float through broken
    A broken and mangled mentality
    I will never awake

    Submitted on 2009-03-15 03:26:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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