this is apart of me -------------------------------------------
so sinister of me to hide these feelings and thoughts from you
this perfect fitting mask i wear for you all the time to decieve for deception
yet how it does no good for me but decieves me deeply inside
look into my eyes and you see nothing is it because iam nothing
your soft skin your sweet loving heart is the end of me
i feel like cry for you but then my heart is filled with hate and anger
tears would fall for no reason for no trust for no faith theyd fall for nothing
your like this perfect blomming flower that ive picked
cared and watered watched you shine threw the days
slowly dieing after time goes on slowly fadeing to black
no flower no beauty last forever for this my flower i give up
a trickster with a mask a loving young sweet heart together
these feelings i feel these thoughts i think this is apart of me
my life
"your soft skin your sweet loving heart is the end of me"
that is definitely my favorite line from this poem.
I'm not sure, but a lot of people tonight are choosing to leave out punctuation, but believe it or not, punctuation can be the key to increasing the quality of an poem you can write. I know it's not the periods and commas that make a poem... it's the word themselves... but when the words stumble and pile on top of each other, their meaning becomes hidden. Maybe you should just go over this again and add a couple periods and commas and whatnot.. and maybe even check a couple misspellings.
As for the meaning and depth of this, I'm almost feeling it.
Submission Name: this is apart of me
