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    dots Submission Name: something I knowdots
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    Author: sunsetserenity
    ASL Info:    21/f
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 23/17/12
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotssomething I knowdots
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    Tomorrow when the sunrays speak
    and the birds race ahead for breakfast,
    I know, despite the glad tidings
    and sunlit faces,
    You'll still be there
    And I'll still be here.

    Next winter, when the autumn turns into snow
    and the snowmen smile their hidden stories,
    Despite the joyful singing
    and excited children,
    You'll still be there
    And I'll still be here.

    I know.




    Submitted on 2009-03-15 05:36:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate so much to the separation depicted here. How regardless of life's little beauties and the constant passing of time, the separation remains. Like one other person commented, the contrast of seasons works well and helps the depict the idea of uncontrollable change. Its a beautiful write
    | Posted on 2009-05-08 00:00:00 | by jaramae | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree, there is grace to be found here. an acceptance or understanding of longing maybe. well, that's what i get out of it anyhow. like the world turns the way it always does, and time passes in the way it must, but it doesn't change the feeling of it all underneath, and life continues on.

    hmmm. yea. glad i popped in.
    thanks for the words.
    | Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      there is a simplicity and grace to this piece which i enjoyed, very much so... an honesty which touches me to the core.

    hard to say in a few words but you manage to say just enough: the seasonal contrasts you mention, the imagery of this, is what i could picture and relate to on an instinctual level.

    gracias.
    | Posted on 2009-03-15 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]


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