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Author: save me
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i feel so sick,
sick to my stomach.
i can't bare this any more.
i've had enough,
i wish this feeling would just go away.
nauseated, that's the word that fills my mind.




Submitted on 2009-03-15 20:19:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very short and to the point. And sometimes that is just what we need.

But I don't think that is this time.

So far, this is good. But I think you could drag it on a little further and bring more depth to it. Are you sick physically or emotionally? Did something happen to make you feel this way? Is it anger? Hurt? Betrayal? Or just a stomach-ache?
| Posted on 2009-03-16 00:00:00 | by myownvitality | [ Reply to This ]


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