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    Author: save me
    ASL Info:    19/F
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 26/51/53
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    i feel so sick,
    sick to my stomach.
    i can't bare this any more.
    i've had enough,
    i wish this feeling would just go away.
    nauseated, that's the word that fills my mind.




    Submitted on 2009-03-15 20:19:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very short and to the point. And sometimes that is just what we need.

    But I don't think that is this time.

    So far, this is good. But I think you could drag it on a little further and bring more depth to it. Are you sick physically or emotionally? Did something happen to make you feel this way? Is it anger? Hurt? Betrayal? Or just a stomach-ache?
    | Posted on 2009-03-16 00:00:00 | by myownvitality | [ Reply to This ]


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