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    dots Submission Name: Butterflydots
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    Author: Little Gal
    ASL Info:    20 female, Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 469/431/94
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 1004
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    Description:
       A dream i had


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    dotsButterflydots
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    Swifting so slowly
    With elegance
    Flowing with such light weight

    All the different shades
    From milky lime,
    To dark green
    On its small wings

    It makes no sound
    That can be heard
    But makes beauty
    And passion
    In a delicaty high class

    Bringing a tear of joy
    To every eye
    That witnesses its nature




    Submitted on 2004-07-13 23:50:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a good poem I enjoyed it. It reminded me of this guy named Waylon Mercy..he had a butterfly and started making a poem about it something like
    "Beautiful butterfly, flying so gracefully through the sky so innocent" Something like that. He was being all nice and then at the end he Crushed it...that was the last we saw of him and it's still a mystery to where that angle was going...anyways thanks for the poem it was good and it reminded me of Wrestling.
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by SKillz_Heckle | [ Reply to This ]
      from what u wrote it simple and clear abt the abstract nature of a person who dreams... some dreams never die...
    so u never have a dream... that ... u had... keep dreaming and before u know they will real and u will feel like ur in a dream
    get back to reality as soon as possible
    nice work
    | Posted on 2004-07-14 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      This really nice. I thought the fact is was a dream was really intersting, and I love the way you put it. It is very abstract, but makes me think of nature in many respects. Good write!
    | Posted on 2004-07-14 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]


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