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    dots Submission Name: Watchin' You (BRAND NEW SONG)dots
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    Author: Jazzy
    ASL Info:    20/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 90/221/227
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 889
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1350



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    dotsWatchin' You (BRAND NEW SONG)dots
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    All day, all day
    I've been thinkin'
    About you.
    All day, all day
    You've been on my
    Mind, all day.

    I wonder all the time
    If you're the one for me
    Oh I wonder all the time
    If you even know who I am.

    Watching you through the
    Cracks in your fence
    Oh I've been
    Waving at you, from afar,
    I wonder if
    Maybe I'm scarin' you
    Or if you feel me too,
    I just wonder.

    You said hi, and I said
    Hello and then we just
    Waved goodbye and I felt
    A tingle through my spine
    There was nothin' you could
    Do to change they way I feel about you
    I don't even know why.

    Watching you through the
    Cracks in your fence
    Oh I've been
    Waving at you, from afar,
    I wonder if
    Maybe I'm scarin' you
    Or if you feel me too,
    I just wonder.

    I just wonder if maybe
    You're right for me
    I just wonder if maybe
    You'll look at me
    I just wonder if maybe
    You even care.

    Watchin' you through the
    Cracks in your fence
    Wondering if your even
    Watching back.






    Submitted on 2009-03-16 17:51:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can see now where you get your non-formal rhythm from, -- from your music, writing lyrics! I enjoyed this one, nice warmth and youth in it. Ted.
    | Posted on 2009-03-22 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]


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