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    dots Submission Name: Rebellion at The Causedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsRebellion at The Causedots

    Rebellion at The Cause

    Iím running on a heat wave
    Dancing with angels on a pin head
    Slapped on a pallet
    Of curious colours

    Uses me in mad artistic brush strokes

    Tripping on a ballet
    Like a fire crackers splash
    Shimmying on dangerous sidewalk cracks
    Careless freak of Friday night

    Gyrations jigger and giddy with me

    I am beating at piano keys
    Swaying harmonious epiphanies
    Plucking at bestial heart strings
    And jumping into Satanís fire, screaming

    Rebellions bravery has made me uncaring of Eden

    While tap dancing on heated coals
    Chill ice pulses cold
    And with a sniff I quaff
    This fine and elegant cup of human blood

    Buggered you be if you think you can stop me

    I am the screeching banshee
    The fickle candescence of your haunted innocence
    A wailing stranger
    On a list of statistical abuses

    And it will be a dark night indeed, when you find me

    A vengeance of seething retribution
    Has come to steal away your comfortable heaven
    And mock your bloodlines
    Even now my shoeless feet pirouette in the dust

    And a million angels can balance sublime on a pinhead

    I cavort on the edge
    Ride the fleshes roller coaster of touches
    And die slapped to a pallet
    Of ever curious colours

    Not with the tongues of a million angels can you catch

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