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    dots Submission Name: Freyja’s Rivaldots
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    Author: col13x
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    Freyja’s Rival


    ( And may the Great Queen of the Norse Forgive me )

    It’s a sun scintillation of a today
    The sky a sharp atmospheric
    Crystal blue chimes
    Reaches to the untold dominion of stars

    Crisp light softens the out shouting colours
    Temperance to dancing whispers
    “Quiet now” says the Sun
    “Other lovers are out shinning today”

    Your eyes a sparkling flash of azure
    Smiling so long and so deep
    Happy has anchored itself
    On your complicit lashes
    And you are far too beautiful
    For my heart to withstand

    Such captivating mysteries of an Elfin legend
    They say that Freyja was Queen of the North
    The Gods had blessed her
    With flaming hair
    She was the desperate love
    Of many a brave warrior

    The sun licks her fire inflamed
    And prances with breezes
    Lifting your curls and locks in scattered incendiaries
    Flows red with the blood heated in my veins

    Would that I could see you now
    Standing there naked
    And bathed in your glory
    My nymphet Queen
    Sure that those shades
    Are the boundaries of your purple Burgundies wings
    Striking their flutter
    On the bright surroundings of living green

    But I must content myself
    In the curves of your pale blue chiffon
    Knowing that the Norse Queen is a little jealous
    Of the Queen of the South




    For a mother and a woman have left me so impressed
    That loves ever pull egress
    To your direction
    Repeats in my soul
    Its forgone conclusion

    And there beneath an old grand oak
    We sat and littered the picnic table
    With all manner of fairy cakes
    And sipped on the wine
    The sweet wine of our life
    In your sparkling laughter of this days happiness
    You were more magnificent
    Than any Elfin Princess

    And anymore love my heart could contain
    Would pour from my chest
    And race giggling to the dizziest heights
    Of sharp atmospheric crystal clear blue
    Reaching out to the dominion of stars
    To call out your name

    To be sure

    They would hear me

    My love





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