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    dots Submission Name: Northdots

    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 794
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    The man marches on against the night,
    each finger a victom to frostbite,
    He cannot see beyound his own hand,
    he struggles to breath in this harshest of lands.

    The chill rushes in and seems to stab into his very soul,
    the man keeps marching, but he is losing controll,
    his footsteps lost to the snow in this land of no remorse,
    Nature is bereft of compassion when she takes a cold course.

    His vision is blurred now as his time slips away,
    and his breath is frozen on this coldest of days.
    A frozen figure remains as the cold moves away,
    the man remains an ice statue, untill the first warm spring day.

    Submitted on 2009-03-16 19:25:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
    how dare someone say it's retarded.
    you are an amazing poet.
    i think the "pskyo" is actully a pysco for saying that!
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this one.

    Of course... I'm kind of required to, because you totally used "bereft" in there... which earns you brownie points for sure.

    Even if you hadn't used that word though, I still would have liked it. There are a few misspelled words in there, but nothing big.

    All-in-all, great job!
    | Posted on 2009-03-22 00:00:00 | by bereftXofXheart | [ Reply to This ]
      this is [censored]in retarded... i'm going to look at some of your other posts, just to see if it's typical or just a mistake before I actually pass judgment on you.
    | Posted on 2009-03-17 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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