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The Final Farewell


Author: Sephiroth
ASL Info:    22/Male/WA
Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 60 /67 /29
Words: 84
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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You and I both remember when it began...
You and I thought we'd never see the end...
But the time approaches fast.
Good things can never last.
So to prepare for that, let's just pretend...


The Final Farewell



Side by side we fought our way to the top;
Never did we ever come to a stop.
But then came the day when you stopped running.
I turned back and tried to used my items,
But you lay there, completely unmoving.

Time had not treated you well, my old friend.
I guess for you, this is the final end.
You will always be in my memories
For my only partner in life was you.
Thank you for that. I love you, Pikachu.




Submitted on 2009-03-17 01:06:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The end to this was so startling! It was only until i had read it twice over that i realized just what this was about. I love seeing a poem about Pikachu!

Even though it's about the poor thing falling for the last time. It's very melancholy for such a cutesie subject as little pikachu.

The second line sort of throws one off for a moment, maybe experiment with rewording it?

This was a cool drink of water, thanks!

-CC

| Posted on 2009-03-17 00:00:00 | by CourtneyLynne | [ Reply to This ]


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