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My Heart Wilts_

Author: Maranne
ASL Info:    17/PA
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Words: 193
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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It was an assignment of mine from creative writing class a response poem for the song "Eleanor Rigby"

My Heart Wilts_

Can you see me now?
The way I used to be: Believing
in something;
I was so naive.
How could I think,
it was ever possible
to be loved?

I wonder with a weary mind;
teary eyes, so blind.

This mirror before me,
only tells the truth. Yet,
I’m so ashamed to look
at my lonely self.
He was mine… and
no one else’s; then the reaper
kidnapped him— and death
rang its luring bells.
Who is there to blame?
I wonder with a weary mind
teary eyes so blind.
That man,
how he stands so sure
of himself, preaching beliefs…
neither of mine nor
anyone else.

This church is empty,
pews unoccupied;
He stands speaking of
no one will hear;
no wedding will be here.
Who is there to blame?
Surely there will come a day…

My poor love will come back,
and I will be waiting…
soundlessly, endlessly
Death will ring
its bells once more.

Death; is the one to blame…
Or is it me?

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