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    dots Submission Name: Convulsionsdots
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    Author: Old
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 69/97/93
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsConvulsionsdots
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    Beauty is for sale
    so trade in your beliefs
    before they go stale
    and obtain some trees.

    The only cost for
    your every desire
    as a lonely whore
    is an all consuming fire.

    Inferno for your eyes
    seems a worthy trade,
    but all you offer is lies.

    Existence has been paid
    and realitys hands are tied.




    Submitted on 2009-03-18 01:23:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thats deep but its hard to tell which direction
    you want to take this piece.

    I like it, but I think you need to add a little more.

    Late J
    | Posted on 2009-03-20 00:00:00 | by oononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]


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