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    dots Submission Name: Glass vesseldots
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    Author: rubymoon
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 155/162/91
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGlass vesseldots
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    Imagine you are holding a glass still
    as water pours in to fill it. It is a lovely vessel
    but made of fragile span glass. Only designed
    to hold a certain amount... Entranced by how
    the water looks as it spills into it.

    A falling drop,
    meeting the surface and
    ripples across the surface...
    going outwards and crossing back over

    Fuller and fuller the vessel gets
    ...till a moment when another drop would shatter it
    Would you let it overflow and fall as tears, or
    would you still hold it in, wanting to see
    more, wanting even more yet?

    Emotions are like that, entrancing, enthralling
    holding your attention till its almost overflowing.
    Then, it becomes unbearable... till you shatter or cry




    Submitted on 2009-03-18 03:33:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is an interesting poem not much emotion but stir the heart. I like how you’ve created a comparison in a sense to life and the vessel if it to over flow, plus adding the ripples as if emotions stir. I liked it, it was very good.


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    | Posted on 2009-03-20 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]


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