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    Author: rubymoon
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 155/162/91
    Words: 140
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    I am envious of those who can just,
    pick up a pencil and sketch or draw a picture,
    or someone who can pick up a pen and words flow,
    onto a paper. Someone who can convey what they want
    ...with just a few strokes, a few lines.

    Who wouldn’t be envious when they see the finished product?
    Words to convey emotions, a scenario, or even a memory
    ... or a picture to convey a thousand words. Who,
    Question what goes on to get that piece to where it is.
    Do anyone look at the crumpled paper of uncontentment?
    or even the fallen dust of the eraser? Erasing what is out of place
    The careful trimmings and handling while trying not to let it
    look over handled. Since art is organised chaos according to some...
    ...one that I know




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      Join the club Rubymoon regarding drawing or sketching. But maybe I can help a bit with poetry. For practice, when reading anything, try to make the matter rhythmical, -- simply with dit dah timing with each syllable. Such as for the first part of your write here eg:-

    I really am so envious of those who can,
    using any pencil, sketch or draw an image,
    or those who can pick up a pen, and words will flow with beauty onto paper. etc.

    i REA-lly AM so EN-vi-OUS of THOSE who CAN etc.
    lowercase = unstressed
    upper case = stressed

    I hope this helps? Ted.

    | Posted on 2009-03-19 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      ruby my dear,
    know anyone whos stymied to write a piece in a few words? or just write down the whole story at once?
    i dont.
    everything that goes with it belongs to it. theres no real trimming or handling something you do, i suppose. i dont know if i can make myself clear.
    dont know if youre being completely ironic or not. i think im delearning english again.
    but nice job, i like the language, what words you used and all that stuff.
    doesnt seem like a journal entry, though i think if youd have done it wrong it would.

    spring and ice,
    alan
    | Posted on 2009-03-18 00:00:00 | by Jimi James | [ Reply to This ]


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