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    dots Submission Name: Little Lightdots
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    Author: dear
    Elite Ratio:    2.9 - 8/16/19
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLittle Lightdots
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    Hanging in midair,
    suspended in the night,
    something always there,
    to keep us safe with sight.

    Essence of a prayer,
    to shun away our fright,
    sleeping in its care,
    as we're tucked in tight.

    Quickly growing unaware,
    resting at our own delight,
    keeping away all despair,
    conquers little light.




    Submitted on 2009-03-18 18:50:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh dear, are you good at anything else?

    Hatma.
    | Posted on 2009-05-24 00:00:00 | by InNoMood44Play | [ Reply to This ]
      Well writtien with a very tight rhyme. Skipped along nicely and a joy to read.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2009-03-21 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww. I love this. It's so pretty and sweet. And, of course, you use those little descriptive lines that are just like red oaks in a dwindling forest! ((Essence of a prayer))


    This reminds me of my little sister. She's always been my little light, pushing away the darkness when it threatens to overcome me. She's pretty great like that. And, I try to be the same for her. She's what makes me the me I strive to be.


    Yup, I really like this. <3


    Great write.


    --Sweets
    | Posted on 2009-03-19 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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