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    dots Submission Name: Insidesdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 556
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       Experimental (To me with a personal bang)
    My biggest hope is that someone gets some of it.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    There Isn't Any Place Like Home
    Sleeping on a plane
    a pane of glass and
    staring up into the root of a tree.

    waves roll

    Thunder waves roll
    They swish, swash,

    Waves eat sand and spit sand.

    White moon painted light stretched out across an endless horizon
    and the pale liquid cream green sky

    A star sits on the thick black line on the tip-toe top of the sea

    There is no direction but a wind in a vivid dream
    and no mind but to know the truth

    the face
    that tick tocks

    And like my father I will never wear a watch

    Filled to the brim so with
    electric magnetism
    Floating above my sparkling eyes
    A see saw
    A Balance Beam
    Pivoting above my Rose(nose)
    Light and a Vaccuum.

    Submitted on 2009-03-19 01:59:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Again - the watch, feeling trapped by time? I love the pictures. It is like music. It's good. I don't think you wanted people to really understand what you were trying to say - rather paint some pictures for them and kind of give them a map that leads to the same end but with a whole bunch of different ways to get there. Cool stuff - music with words.
    | Posted on 2009-03-29 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it's lovely. No, I don't quite understand it, but I think that's more my lack of creative thought and inspiration than it is your writing. Maybe I'll get it if my mind ever returns to an inspired sort of state. I do like the part about the magnetism and sparkling eyes though...
    | Posted on 2009-03-19 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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