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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 262/243/141
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Shadow twists
    Making image where there once was only darkness
    From the corners it seeps
    Fog
    Noise filters in
    These arms where once shelter
    Seclusion from the storm
    Now they meld
    Becoming one with my tormentor
    When the dreams mix with the living thatís when sanity gets lost




    Submitted on 2009-03-19 03:16:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i dont even believe in sanity anymore. i swear there is no such thing as sane because everyone jsut different and kinda crazy in theyre own way. its okay. keep posting. i like it.






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    | Posted on 2009-03-19 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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