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    dots Submission Name: Eternitydots
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    Author: rubymoon
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 155/162/91
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       A piece of a 60 words or less story contest on another site.


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    dotsEternitydots
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    “Give me a kiss and I’ll give you all of eternity” said the angel and so the mortal did. The angel fell from her place in heaven to be with him but the mortal turned away in anger for the angel did not give him eternity.

    She did, just in a different way from what he expected. Both fools.




    Submitted on 2009-03-19 06:32:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well written and well intended. I recall not sooo long ago in a mystical place called Eden, an angel of the Abyss went through the same sequel with a Wo-man and the same thing happened. He took her eternal Soul and she received time-out Death. Now she also twisted the truth about this meeting and her Father got angry. Soooo, here we are again serving with kisses in exchange for eternal Nothing. How strange we Souls are! Love yours Joachim.
    | Posted on 2009-05-11 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2009-03-19 00:00:00 | by myownvitality | [ Reply to This ]
      What fools are we that fall in love...

    I shudder at the memories of all I have given up for a taste of this same love.

    Is it worth the sacrifice?

    Good piece. In less than 60 words you have revealed a whole novel worth of passion and foolery.
    | Posted on 2009-03-19 00:00:00 | by myownvitality | [ Reply to This ]


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