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    dots Submission Name: Give Backdots
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    Author: Rubesangel
    ASL Info:    16/female/ LehighAcers Fl
    Elite Ratio:    2.06 - 8/13/25
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 626
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1395



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    dotsGive Backdots
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    Darkest depths of my soul
    Slowly being destroyed my your chemical.
    I'm Tired of being alone.
    last love has turned my heart cold as stone
    Trust, Love, and faith all thrown back in my face.
    I'm Such i Fuckin' disgrace
    You dont deserve the comfort of my love
    and i didn't deserve to be punched, pushed your shoved.
    did i even mean anything to you?
    or was i just a toy for you to Subdue?
    i don't know anymore the real me
    When i look in the mirror i can't understand
    what or who i see
    you've sent me back to the way i use to be
    Cold hearted, bitter and inside angry
    The blood from my wrists tell my story
    i wanna die be dead and buried
    my image of myself is inncomplete, broken,and dead.
    Why is my blood all that is being shed?
    i konw i'm not perfect
    nothing but i burded for some lost soul to collect.
    But you made me think different
    but it was all a lie and every word you never meant
    but i will find some one better then you
    And with that happiness there's nothing you can do.
    Give me what i could never ask for
    Give me back my heart, untore.
    So i can give it to another who deserves
    what i have to give
    A dead soul Desperatly wants to live.




    Submitted on 2009-03-19 09:44:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There is a lot of emotion in this but it's really good.
    A few things could be improved but I understand what all you mean.

    Definitely keep writing. :)
    | Posted on 2010-09-02 00:00:00 | by InheritedScars | [ Reply to This ]
      there a just some lil words that i think u ment to be somting else, but i did like this i think that it was very well writen and the feeligns came across very well. but i do think for this on it could have been better, just a lol more. im not say'n change it cuz ik i hate changing someething ive done. i do think u have what it takes to be an amazing writer so just keep up the good work.

    tayla.

    p.s i dont know if the cutting in this poem is somehting u really do, i do it so if u do cut and u need someone to talk to who doesnt know the whole story and can be open to ur story then u can talk to me.
    | Posted on 2009-04-21 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! This is an amazing poem
    I could feel all the feelings as I read
    Very intense. Very, very good job. Keep writing
    | Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by Toosha | [ Reply to This ]
      amazingg.. i don't know wut to say..


    i love how you can write exactly how you feel.. i can feel what you feel too.. just by reading it..


    i hate that lonely feeling.. (it sux)

    but if your anything like me writting helps..

    good job..

    keep it up
    | Posted on 2009-03-19 00:00:00 | by TalentedChild | [ Reply to This ]


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