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    dots Submission Name: You and Idots
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    Author: Rubesangel
    ASL Info:    16/female/ LehighAcers Fl
    Elite Ratio:    2.06 - 8/13/25
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 506
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    dotsYou and Idots
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    You and I, were perfect together
    You and I, were loving each moment
    but time has moved on, these feelings grew old
    the once hidden message, began to unfold.
    Unfold like the letter, you open today
    Unfold like my feelings, as they slip away
    our world has stopped turning, it isn't the same.
    our trust for each other, has turn in to shame
    Shame like the hurt, i see in your eyes
    Shame like my pride i covered with lies
    There's room to recover, there's others out there.
    we have more to give, we have more to share.
    we stand here alone, with nothing to say
    left speechless and hurt on this break up day.




    Submitted on 2009-03-19 09:57:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is very sad. u did a nice job with the flow. you got ur feelings across very well. nice job i can see wonderful things happin'n with ur writing keep up the good work. imma add this a fav cuz i really liked it. i hope soo ill be able to add more.lol

    tayla
    | Posted on 2009-04-21 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]
      oh that is so sad. i hate breakups. think happy.



    tina
    | Posted on 2009-03-19 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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