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I feel more like a Skeleton When...

Author: Jazzy
ASL Info:    20/f/USA
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 90 /221 /227
Words: 122
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I like this one kinda.

I feel more like a Skeleton When...

I feel more like a skeleton when
I crack my jaw at night.
I can see in my head a white skull
Cracking his jaw as well.
Then he'll stare back at me,
And we'll both wonder.

I feel more like a skeleton when
I sway my hips on my way around
The block every afternoon.
I can see the x-ray image of hip bones
Thigh bones, pelvic bones grinding together
As they shimmy down the street.

I feel more like a skeleton when
I'm in the grocery store
Reaching up to the top shelf.
I can see that skeleton straining,
Stretching out to his very limits
Pale bones dull in the florescent lighting.

Submitted on 2009-03-20 01:00:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'm new to Elite Skills, so I don't know if Ive read, or posted anything on yours before, so here goes. You have an unusual ability to see into your body/skeleton such as I never had. Your write is thought provoking and interesting. Also, you have a natural non-formal rhythm which one has to become used to get the swing of it. My advice is to always aim at improving your rhythm, which is a necessity for poetry. Rhyming does not, on its own, a poem make, but rhythm does! Ted.
| Posted on 2009-03-20 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]

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