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    dots Submission Name: Warmthdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 914
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    Bytes: 456



    Description:
       Being afriad that the man you want and love will not take you back and then realizing you still have him...you've had him all along


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    dotsWarmthdots
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    The window
    Aparant
    To the sorrow filled sea
    And open
    Rejection
    Threads snapping
    At the seam
    On the trail
    I break
    Alonely fallen seed
    Bury me
    Into a pile
    Of leaves
    Sounds of a stepping
    Drawing close
    To the scene
    Just open my eyes
    It was only
    A dream
    I am free
    To feel this
    Warmth
    Of him
    Beside me




    Submitted on 2009-03-20 10:44:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Okay...first off, let's get a typo taken care of: Aparant in the second line should be Apparent.

    I think my favorite line is.


    'A lonely fallen seed'


    To me it symbolizes new birth. At least the seed does..together it seems to be saying that this...'seed' is born into a broken world. Or something. It's hard to explain what this line makes me think.


    It kind of sounds choppy in my head when I read it. Maybe some punctuation would smooth that out...maybe not. *shrugs* Ultimately, it's up to you and how you intend it to read. Everyone takes things differently.
    | Posted on 2009-03-20 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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