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If Looks Could Kill

Author: PhantomRose
ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43 /58 /35
Words: 114
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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lol my dad sucks :P

If Looks Could Kill

If looks could kill
Believe me, you'd be long gone
If looks could kill
You'd have no steady ground to stand on
If looks could kill
There's no way you'd have lasted this long
If looks could kill
Right now I'd be singing a happy death song
If looks could kill
Your head would've exploded 12 times
If looks could kill
You would've choked to death on 87 limes
If looks could kill
You'd be cold as stone
If looks could kill
You'd know what it's like to be really alone
If looks could kill
You'd have no control over me
If looks could kill
I'd finally be free.

Submitted on 2009-03-20 13:10:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very original and striking poem. Very good.
| Posted on 2009-03-22 00:00:00 | by Lilyan | [ Reply to This ]
  very creative , nice blend , right to the point
| Posted on 2009-03-21 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice! It's a good poem and I would defintely share it.
| Posted on 2009-03-20 00:00:00 | by wolfgurl830 | [ Reply to This ]

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