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    dots Submission Name: If Looks Could Killdots
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    Author: PhantomRose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43/58/35
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsIf Looks Could Killdots
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    If looks could kill
    Believe me, you'd be long gone
    If looks could kill
    You'd have no steady ground to stand on
    If looks could kill
    There's no way you'd have lasted this long
    If looks could kill
    Right now I'd be singing a happy death song
    If looks could kill
    Your head would've exploded 12 times
    If looks could kill
    You would've choked to death on 87 limes
    If looks could kill
    You'd be cold as stone
    If looks could kill
    You'd know what it's like to be really alone
    If looks could kill
    You'd have no control over me
    If looks could kill
    I'd finally be free.




    Submitted on 2009-03-20 13:10:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very original and striking poem. Very good.
    | Posted on 2009-03-22 00:00:00 | by Lilyan | [ Reply to This ]
      very creative , nice blend , right to the point
    | Posted on 2009-03-21 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice! It's a good poem and I would defintely share it.
    | Posted on 2009-03-20 00:00:00 | by wolfgurl830 | [ Reply to This ]


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