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    dots Submission Name: America, Explain it to Medots
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    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 69/55/29
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I am not judging all people just stating that many of us are not doing as we should and America is no longer the great place it once was.


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    dotsAmerica, Explain it to Medots
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    In my anger do I write,
    In my own shame do I move this pen,
    At the fact that I have crossed many lines,
    Daring others to condemn me,
    And in my selfishness,
    Injustice,
    And pride,
    In the midst of my own gratification,
    America died,
    It fell,
    No, it made its choice,
    It started a war with God,
    Challenging His power,
    So now it pays the price,
    Families are fallen,
    Mothers slay their children,
    Fathers mollest and rape,
    Brothers surrender to heroin's allure,
    Sisters wallow in sadness,
    While the churches judge,
    Instead of healing,
    The churches now condemn our world,
    Or they avoid the pain,
    So tell me when did my country fall?
    And tell me if it still deserves my alleigance?
    When the world dies around me
    And friends become enemies,
    While we live in uncertainty,
    Of our future,
    Our women play the harlot, the whore,
    Our men are cowards or stubborn, and prideful,
    So I beg you, tell me when we fell!
    From a caring, Godly country,
    To the foothold of hell.




    Submitted on 2009-03-20 17:17:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This reminds me of a saying: "The only thing required for evil to succeed is for good people to do nothing."

    I understand your ire but I think to make it more honest, perhaps you could remove some of the clichés?
    | Posted on 2009-03-22 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was a little to simple, you need to show me your outraged here it makes me feel your just telling me your a bit upset. Try to tweak it, it's got potential.
    | Posted on 2009-03-22 00:00:00 | by Cathartus | [ Reply to This ]



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