[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: night blindness (repost)dots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 580
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 462

       i reposted this cause i just need more feed back as im on teh fence

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsnight blindness (repost)dots

    I walk
    Back and forth
    In front of the window
    each car is yours
    Till it isnít
    Each minute slinks out ashamed
    Not again
    Head lights light the black kitchen
    For a moment I am lighter too
    They go
    Leaving just the night
    I bite my thumb
    Till I taste metal
    I go through lies in my head
    I make them for you
    That is what I do
    Because I love you

    Submitted on 2009-03-20 20:11:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      sounds like you need to figure out what you really want, do you want a guy that'll only want a physical relationship, or someone with some emotional depth and a future with you. the way you are percieved is the way you will be treated. let men know what kind of woman you are from the beginning.
    | Posted on 2009-10-24 00:00:00 | by ghad | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Bond written by saartha
    written by Daniel Barlow
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Push written by JanePlane
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Happy Saint Patrick's Day written by poetotoe
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    Every..... written by jackz
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Fasade written by jackz
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Linger written by saartha
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]