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    dots Submission Name: night blindness (repost)dots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 262/243/141
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 569
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    Description:
       i reposted this cause i just need more feed back as im on teh fence


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    dotsnight blindness (repost)dots
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    I walk
    Back and forth
    In front of the window
    each car is yours
    Till it isnít
    Each minute slinks out ashamed
    Not again
    Head lights light the black kitchen
    For a moment I am lighter too
    They go
    Leaving just the night
    I bite my thumb
    Till I taste metal
    I go through lies in my head
    I make them for you
    That is what I do
    Because I love you




    Submitted on 2009-03-20 20:11:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sounds like you need to figure out what you really want, do you want a guy that'll only want a physical relationship, or someone with some emotional depth and a future with you. the way you are percieved is the way you will be treated. let men know what kind of woman you are from the beginning.
    | Posted on 2009-10-24 00:00:00 | by ghad | [ Reply to This ]


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