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    dots Submission Name: rememberdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsrememberdots
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    REMEMBER
    If you could have seen her face
    Watched her eyes sparkle
    That silly little diamond
    That red rose
    The way candlelight plays off her hair
    Her scar hides in her dimple
    Even now I smile
    The thought of her
    She falls asleep with her hand just by her mouth
    And there is a beauty there
    I cant understand
    A mystery that is hers alone
    All those things I thought seemed small
    Now in retrospect are so very big
    To her they were the world
    the tiny snapshots that I now treasure she always did
    Never forget her
    Touch her hand
    Remind her she is safe
    Memorize every smile
    Even when she is sad remember
    Because she will




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