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    dots Submission Name: truth be tolddots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 407
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 573
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2105



    Description:
       anyone who knows me will tell you i dont write about myself i did here this was taken right from my diary and i havent even made it into anythig yet so here i am in the raw yiks...


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    dotstruth be tolddots
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    Who am I
    Or shall I say who was I before
    Before I was yours
    Its hard to recall now
    You would not have liked me then
    No one has ever liked that me
    I painted in the dark sometimes and without brush
    Just fingertips , and I never used an easel
    Just sat Indian style on the tattered wooden floor
    Bare foot, dazed id emerge a day later paint in my already dyed hair dark circles of mascara
    I loved the smell right before it rains
    Do you know that
    Do you
    I would take a walk as far from the man made as I could get and I would look up and let drops hit my face
    I sometimes laughed when I was alone
    Maybe I thought of a funny thing maybe I just liked my own laugh
    My best friend says I am a dreamer a free spirit
    Hahhaha
    Imagine me with any spirit at all
    I bite my thumb when im worried my mother did the same I have lil scars from it
    I love to learn anything and everything
    My mind is never full ..ever
    I loved to sculpt to make something from nothing
    Fall is my favorite season
    it is the witch in me
    I am closest to the veil
    and I can even be happy now and again in the autumn
    Did you know I am a Capricorn
    Did you know that
    And I believe a million things
    Most contradict themselves
    I believe in true love
    And I notice everything remember everything
    Every little thing
    The lines of my mothers knuckles
    The way your car smelled the first day
    I know every line in your face even in the dark
    I walk a fine line between here and there
    Silly things are so important to me lil gestures
    Small touches
    A whisper, a sigh
    The flower you brought me
    When you put my mothers ring on my finger
    Sometimes I think you see me
    Every once in a while I catch your stare
    And I have to rush hush her
    I have to remind me who you want me to be






    Submitted on 2009-03-20 20:19:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Loving the personal! Very descriptive, I'm assuming you! Excellent! I absolutely applaude you for this! ...but don't tell anyone, okay? haha. But seriously, it is overall excelent and I would not do a thing to change it.
    | Posted on 2009-03-21 00:00:00 | by Plegias | [ Reply to This ]


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