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    dots Submission Name: Broken Heart Pleadots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.62 - 96/51/46
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsBroken Heart Pleadots
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    I press my hand against the window
    As I watch the world from afar
    Distant storms rage the planet
    Becoming deeper into a scar
    All this sand thats raining down
    Filling just below my feet
    I begin to feel contained
    With my heart falling for defeat

    I know your there and I know your scared
    But could you search your heart to find me
    Iím in between sleep and death
    And through this stained glass itís hard to see
    Though I crumble and fall beneath the sand
    Would you still hear my broken heart plea?
    At least grace me and tell me your hear
    Just a whisper to set my mind free

    Iím reaching out
    For the light to take me
    Not to warm my heart
    But to release me
    Iím scream out
    Like thunder and lightning
    Can you hear me
    Just set me free
    Set me free
    This is my broken heart plea




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