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    dots Submission Name: Same Storydots

    Author: EileenToTheLeft
    ASL Info:    28/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 16/36/55
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSame Storydots

    We are the same, I swear,
    as you'll see when times converge.
    I slouch in a tall chair,
    stirring my medicine.
    And you, picking at the wallpaper
    you glued to the kitchen,
    still search for the paint that was there.

    We are the same, you know.

    Submitted on 2009-03-21 13:58:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      How right you are, Eileentotheleft.

    this is cracking goodstuff.

    my take is that she reposes in the knowledge that the relationship is over or flawed-- and that the other knows this but has yet to come to the place where they can accept the truth.

    There's nice scope in this in that it can encompass all types of relationships, not just romantic ones.

    It's sparse and deep and takes great care with words.

    | Posted on 2009-03-21 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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