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    dots Submission Name: but a roomdots
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    Author: cha
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 37/28/31
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsbut a roomdots
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    if all the world were but a room
    and I an inmate in it,
    I should sleep day and night
    and watch the fan tracing
    circles on the wall.

    if my room were all the world
    and I could stay inside it always,
    I should sit in my chair with my
    mind adrift and watch the leaves
    as they changed.

    if my room and the world were
    one and the same,
    and I could live inside it,
    I would drift happy from morning
    to night, dreaming dreams of dreams
    and watching the light
    hovering like butterflies
    on my brain,
    shifting and melting
    and flowing into
    the wall.




    Submitted on 2009-03-21 19:19:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good, I like it a little bit. Though you could have made life more descriptive in it.
    | Posted on 2009-04-18 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]


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