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    dots Submission Name: what would u saydots

    Author: cha
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 37/28/31
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotswhat would u saydots

    What could you say,
    if your daughter ever got raped?
    or say your son was a mass murderer,
    or had a life you couldn't escape?
    What could you say,
    if your body was so broken,
    because your father beat you,
    and called you names the remain unspoken?
    what could you say
    if you fell into depression
    became bulimic or anorexic
    because of your body's imperfections?
    what could you say,
    if tear came to my eyes?
    would you hold my tightly in your arms?
    or simply watch me cry
    what could you say
    if my words came to an end?
    Would you help me recover from broken hopes
    and help me make amends
    what would you say
    if I were never here
    would you continue on with everyday life
    as I slowly disappear?

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