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    Author: Plegias
    ASL Info:    17/ male/ my house
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 37/23/40
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 503
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       We all have flaws, together we can work them out.


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    dotsIf...dots
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    I know this has been asked to you at least a dozen times before,
    But now I carry it on, to one and all galore.
    If you could have one wish, what would it be?
    Just only one wish, consequence free!
    Would it be all the wealth the world could own?
    That give to a bad omen's tome.
    What about life, forever to live?
    Then again, Death does not ever forgive.
    What about love, for eternity's wake?
    That soon would be a bad mistake.
    So what is it then that would come consequence free?
    What is this wish that would likely be?
    Well, sir, madam, I shall tell you now,
    Tis not a wish, but more of a "how."
    If we could see the folley in us all,
    There'd be no reason for a wish to call!
    We needn't a wish to make ourselves better,
    Just all of us, happily together!
    We all have mistakes and we can all fix the other right,
    For in every one of us is a bright, shining light.
    I know, okay, it sounds quite happy and gay,
    But once we relize its truth, all might be okay.




    Submitted on 2009-03-22 00:07:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked this. It's a cheery subject, which you don't see often. I liked a lot of your word choices, and the way your poem flowed.
    | Posted on 2009-03-25 00:00:00 | by BestxDeceptions | [ Reply to This ]
      to many wishes. poe
    | Posted on 2009-03-23 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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