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I remove my studded bracelet
And replace it with some lace.
Where my straight leg pants were,
A crinoline took their place.
I put on a pretty bonnet,
With ribbons through my hair.
A bodice instead of leather coat
Makes my figure seem so fair.
I paint my face the palest white
And brush my cheeks with rouge.
I faintly line my eyes in black,
Glitter and shadow are removed.
Still, with harpsichord echoes
Filling me to the brim,
The words refuse to leave their keep
Of the purest seraphim.
The ink sleeps ever stagnant
Patiently waiting for the quill
To bring the inspired lamplight,
And with that, the Poet’s will.
With gloved hand, I rest my head
And my sigh kisses the page,
As though comforting its blankness
While I stifle my own rage.
| It's so the way though...pushing through the clutter of thoughts till the cohesiveness settles in. We dress them words up...trying to make them fit the mold so many hold in night regard...meh...beauty is beauty and always fall in eye of thee beholder.|
This is BEAUTIFULLY sculpted...not forced...not trite....clear and clever and sound
Me likes it...and happy to start here
|| Posted on 2014-06-02 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ] || Writer's block? Where? This is good doppleganger. I have a few suggestions to smooth it out here and there, just my thoughts!|
S1.L4:- A crinoline is now in place
S2.L4:- Which makes my figure shapely fair
S3. L2:- With rouge my cheeks now glow
L4:- Removed the glitter and shadow
S.4.:- The ink is waiting ever stagnant
Impatient for the waiting quill
To write inspired poetry
With my heart, and poet's will.
S5. L2:- And with my sighs I kiss the page
L3:- That is so blank and comfortless
I'm really rapt in this poem, the above seems a lot, BUT, they are only tweaks. Thanks for posting. Cheers Ted.
|| Posted on 2009-03-23 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ] || Your much better off taking a break from writing instead of pushing it.If you remove yourself from things like the internet,TV etc,live life a bit,if your truly a writer,youll find something to write about.|
Writers block rarely makes for good poetry,your writing is decent enough but its not a good poem.
I suppose you know this allready.
But good luck getting back on the saddle.
|| Posted on 2009-03-22 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ] |