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    dots Submission Name: When the Noose is Dripping Inkdots
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    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34/223/160
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Blah! People said the only way to conquer writers block is to simply write. So my plan is... write about writers block until it admits defeat!


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    dotsWhen the Noose is Dripping Inkdots
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    I remove my studded bracelet
    And replace it with some lace.
    Where my straight leg pants were,
    A crinoline took their place.

    I put on a pretty bonnet,
    With ribbons through my hair.
    A bodice instead of leather coat
    Makes my figure seem so fair.

    I paint my face the palest white
    And brush my cheeks with rouge.
    I faintly line my eyes in black,
    Glitter and shadow are removed.

    Still, with harpsichord echoes
    Filling me to the brim,
    The words refuse to leave their keep
    Of the purest seraphim.

    The ink sleeps ever stagnant
    Patiently waiting for the quill
    To bring the inspired lamplight,
    And with that, the Poet’s will.

    With gloved hand, I rest my head
    And my sigh kisses the page,
    As though comforting its blankness
    While I stifle my own rage.




    Submitted on 2009-03-22 21:00:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's so the way though...pushing through the clutter of thoughts till the cohesiveness settles in. We dress them words up...trying to make them fit the mold so many hold in night regard...meh...beauty is beauty and always fall in eye of thee beholder.

    This is BEAUTIFULLY sculpted...not forced...not trite....clear and clever and sound


    Me likes it...and happy to start here

    | Posted on 2014-06-02 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      Writer's block? Where? This is good doppleganger. I have a few suggestions to smooth it out here and there, just my thoughts!
    S1.L4:- A crinoline is now in place

    S2.L4:- Which makes my figure shapely fair

    S3. L2:- With rouge my cheeks now glow
    L4:- Removed the glitter and shadow

    S.4.:- The ink is waiting ever stagnant
    Impatient for the waiting quill
    To write inspired poetry
    With my heart, and poet's will.

    S5. L2:- And with my sighs I kiss the page
    L3:- That is so blank and comfortless

    I'm really rapt in this poem, the above seems a lot, BUT, they are only tweaks. Thanks for posting. Cheers Ted.
    | Posted on 2009-03-23 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      Your much better off taking a break from writing instead of pushing it.If you remove yourself from things like the internet,TV etc,live life a bit,if your truly a writer,youll find something to write about.

    Writers block rarely makes for good poetry,your writing is decent enough but its not a good poem.

    I suppose you know this allready.

    But good luck getting back on the saddle.

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2009-03-22 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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