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    dots Submission Name: The Skydots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    18/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 440/401/163
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 102
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 471



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    dotsThe Skydots
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    I stand amongst clouds
    Racing throught the sky,
    Who wraps his arms around them,
    and gives a winning smile.

    Shining bright behind me is the sun.
    Harmonzing with the sky.
    Her tune is melodious,
    Simple, Sweet, and shy.

    Nothing can fail me now.
    Nothing can change my life.
    I am untouchable, intangible,
    When I am in the sky.

    And Yet, I falter.
    Falter and fall.




    Submitted on 2009-03-22 23:01:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      very dramatic, heartwarming , keep on writing
    | Posted on 2009-03-28 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      sorry engish, offf. poe
    | Posted on 2009-03-23 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      you will do fine, Little One.

    you are a Goddess...you will not falter.

    you're no icarus, i promise you.

    | Posted on 2009-03-22 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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