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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful Lovedots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 101/55/51
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBeautiful Lovedots
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    The moon sits all alone
    Through crystal waters
    It's majestic is shown

    Beautiful as she can be
    With her saphire heart
    Shinning next to me

    And through her innocent eyes
    The stars light up
    In the darkest skies

    Like warm feeling of summer
    I wish I could hold her
    As she rest upon my shoulder

    As transparent as ice
    She sees inside
    Where my heart hides

    Now all that surrounds
    From her beautiful voice
    Are sweet angelic sounds

    With sparkling tears from her face
    She fills me
    With glory of her grace

    Standing in her radiant light
    I feel my heart
    I feel alive




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