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    dots Submission Name: Isabelladots
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    Author: JoJoCrab
    Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 338/113/129
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 477
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsIsabelladots
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    Darkness rises deeper in the night
    I lay
    Thoughts are of a culture I once had
    My exile is not my fault
    A suitor to the princess
    She intertwines me with her sultry eyes
    I let no man have her love except mine
    I am whisk in manacles as her slave
    My feet are scorch, my throat needs quenching
    I kneel to her surrender




    Submitted on 2009-03-23 10:46:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ummm IDK. it wasnt capturing.It doesnt pull you in.
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by wolfgurl830 | [ Reply to This ]


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