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Submission Name: Isabella dots

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Author:	JoJoCrab
Elite Ratio:	1.06 - 338/113/129
Words:	64

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	477
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	376

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Isabella dots

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Darkness rises deeper in the night
I lay
Thoughts are of a culture I once had
My exile is not my fault
A suitor to the princess
She intertwines me with her sultry eyes
I let no man have her love except mine
I am whisk in manacles as her slave
My feet are scorch, my throat needs quenching
I kneel to her surrender

Submitted on 2009-03-23 10:46:24 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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ummm IDK. it wasnt capturing.It doesnt pull you in.
| Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by wolfgurl830 | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
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