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Halima


Author: JoJoCrab
Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 338 /113 /129
Words: 39
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 1080
Average Vote:    3.0000
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Halima



Crystals of an after glow
A shattered heart in pieces
Why am I a victim?
Her cruelness is no fault
She was only teasing
A dispassionate darkness
I have frozen in pure essence
Can a love stand a barrier?




Submitted on 2009-03-23 10:52:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice work its a good short poem.Adding to faves.
| Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by wolfgurl830 | [ Reply to This ]


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