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    dots Submission Name: Just A shoulder to lean ondots
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    Author: cor
    ASL Info:    16/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 28/25/30
    Words: 309
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsJust A shoulder to lean ondots
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    That's all I need right now...
    Just a shoulder to lean on
    for all these hard times...
    Depressions, pain, and heartache
    That trio that always seem to be as one

    That ever so cruel trio...

    Why cant i just forget about it?
    The cause of all my sorrows
    But alas i cannot,
    in those forever words of a poet
    To let go would only hurt more.

    I'm stuck in a spiral...

    Ive tried it all to soothe the pain.
    Music, love, charity...
    But none ever seem to work for but a day.
    And so every day the pains come back...
    Just to hurt again.

    Why have i been targeted?

    I shall hint at the cause of my problems
    but i cannot tell you it all...
    My heart feels heavy
    my brain utterly confused
    My hands shaking at indecision

    Should I say out loud?

    If someone just came to me,
    Lent me the strength to end this
    and live a happier life,
    I would be grateful
    But there's that one question...

    Who should i let into my heart and soul?

    Why should i trust thee?
    What have you done to earn it?
    How can i know you wont betray me?
    How can i know you wont abandon me?
    Where can i turn to then?

    What would i do?

    There would be nothing left for me
    My life would continue on down this spiral
    That is until My problem leaves me
    Now, Now don't get the wrong idea...
    This is a blissful thing if it was known

    Have you guessed it yet?

    Only those that know me intimately...
    can guess exactly what it is
    So then i guess what I'm saying is...
    Wheres my Savior?
    Wheres my one hope?

    Wheres my shoulder to lean on?




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      Excellent exposition on needing someone but fear of being hurt. You can only be happy in the moment and that must come from you. When you are feeling good about yourself and you treat others with respect, then others will lean on you and you will lean on them. Sure they may disappoint you that times, but you may also disappoint them. We need to overlook the small things to know the good things.
    | Posted on 2009-10-25 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i get it.the moments where you just want soomething to lean on.like you are on your knees.
    "those who cry let people inside,but those who are tough say they have had enough"

    -rachel-
    | Posted on 2009-05-28 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      wow >.< urh can i ask a question...urh when you put trio...u mean the holy trinity? does the poem relates to religion too? anyway, hey - like you said right- problems will pass...and like i said, if u choose to let it pass. but soul searching sounds kinda cool ya know.
    | Posted on 2009-03-25 00:00:00 | by rosesrouges | [ Reply to This ]
      showing who you are, reaching out, emotional rescue, understanding , great poem
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      good poem of longing that what it seems like to me, ty
    | Posted on 2009-03-23 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]


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