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    dots Submission Name: What You Have Lostdots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 339
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    I gave you it all, my heart mind and soul.
    I would have done anything for you.
    Whatever it took to keep you happy,
    But to you that wasn’t enough.
    You had to go and take what I couldn’t give.

    You decided when we were through,
    Gave me no choice and found the worst way.
    You picked at me till you thought I would break.
    The tears in my eyes they made you smile,
    The rip in my soul made you happy.
    The broken heart in my eyes made you giggle.

    The more pain I had, the more u became giddy.
    How can you be the same person who said he loved me?
    When now you try and shatter me.

    You thought this would be easy,
    Thought I wouldn’t fight you along the way.
    Well you didn’t know me any more than I knew you.
    I may stumble, tears may fall, and there might even be a crack.
    But for no one do I break or shatter.

    You think I am weak, you think I’m not good,
    Well what you think matters not to me.
    One of these days you will see what I really am.
    You will see what you have lost.

    I would have been there for you,
    Would have stayed when everyone else left.
    I would have made you forget all your pain,
    Wouldn’t have let anyone make you cry.

    Instead you went and let me down.
    Made me cry after I gave you everything.
    All the lies you told are now coming to light,
    All you ever did now seems so obvious.
    Now I wonder how I never saw what was right In front of me.

    Though I will be okay in time,
    I suspect in time you will break.
    For you gave up the best you ever had,
    And for what, so you wouldn’t have to argue.
    You couldn’t even stand up for me one time.
    Now you will see what it is you lost.




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      I can relate to this, I have an ex chasing me right now becasue she couldn't find anyone to replace me though she has tried, but she burned the bridge and can't go back to what it was...
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it its really cool!
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by wolfgurl830 | [ Reply to This ]
      This fits a situation in my life right now so perfectly i can't help but cry reading it, especially going back to my journal and reading what i wrote not long ago. So like how I feel.
    "I may stumble, tears may fall, and there might even be a crack.
    But for no one do I break or shatter."
    Favorites list, in a heartbeat.

    Lady Rose
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      very affectionate , the words just pulls something out of you , great work on your poem
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Great free verse. It has so many variations with every line; the topic never alters, but the variations in lines and word usage keeps the reader interested. Keep up the good work. Happy Writings~



    'She will chase after you for a while, but there is going to come a day when she will stop running in circles around you. She's going to get over you and at that very moment, you are going to wish you had let her catch you.' -Anon.
    | Posted on 2009-03-23 00:00:00 | by night_angel | [ Reply to This ]


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