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Your Wine Sets in Virginia


Author: Black Rock Tractor
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Your Wine Sets in Virginia



Today I purchased a set of needle-nose pliers
And some Post-It notes and glue

When you go
I will pull from my memory the best of you
Paste it to the notes
And flip them with my thumb

If I call you too often
You will know that the flip book did not work
Or perhaps the memories got stuck

Either way
I’m calling tonight around seven
and if I'm drunk or boring
you will know again that I love you




Submitted on 2009-03-23 22:20:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  GOD!!

this is incredible.
like...

i have so many different responses to this piece.

the first is a song by jenny lewis called you are what you love in which the main refrain says "you are what you love and not what loves you back... thats why im here on your doorstep pleading for you to take me back" [or 'so i guess thats why you keep calling me back'] and it also has a verse thats starts with 'and the phone is fine invention/it allows me to talk endlessly to you/about nothing diguising my intentions/which im afraid my friend are wildly untrue'

lol. so i almost sang you the whole song.


i love the pliers and the post-its.
theres a song by emmy the great [sorry im thinking in songs tonight] called gabriel and theres a video for it in which she is lying on the floor covered in post-it notes saying 'gabriel i have kept/everything you sent me/everything you put on paper' and thats the image i see when i read this piece.

and i like the way you mention phoning too often in one stanza and then either way im calling tonight.

its just a beautiful piece and i must favourite it and revisit it frequently.
| Posted on 2009-03-27 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, the metaphor is great in this one. I think it kind of falls apart at the end, but I'm not sure if you meant to do that or not. It's a nice kind of non-strict pattern to the stanzas, and it forms well.

I just wish it were longer :P

Wishing for more
~Brian
| Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]


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