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    dots Submission Name: Pubertydots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Naked, afraid, transparently thin in the Norwegian cold,
    she lets the man immortalize her awkwardness,
    building her gray-pink form
    one stroke at a time...
    The doe-in-the-headlight eyes,
    the thread-like limbs,
    but the defensive crossed forearms
    cannot hide the metamorphosis,
    confusion replacing childish glee...
    The shadow that hangs about her
    is what she will become jaded and indistinct
    from the routine blandness of this world.
    (From a Painting by Edvard Munch)




    Submitted on 2004-02-10 01:36:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oohh.... confusion replacing childish glee - wonderful . "doe-in-the-headlight-eyes"... HOW do you come up with this stuff???? The take on teenagers is pretty accurate, unfortunately.... one 13yrold girl is pretty much like the next. We all go through that stage of "girl-in-a-woman's-body", not sure who or what we are, or will be, and awkward as hell. Very well done, cuddle. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-21 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      a sad take on puberty, but honest. luckily, there's adulthood for some respite (yeah rite). The words seem so jaded, fragile or scared... adds a lot to the poem. That edvard munch pic, supremely unsettling, had something to do with it!
    | Posted on 2004-02-10 00:00:00 | by hopefloats | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your ability to show me this painting with your words and imagery... strong ending... nice writing
    | Posted on 2004-02-10 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      Another beautiful one. I can just see her. The imagery was very strong and the last couple of lines were powerful.
    | Posted on 2004-02-10 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]


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