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    dots Submission Name: Testing The Sundots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTesting The Sundots
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    Testing The Sun

    Its about to happen
    You can feel it

    There’s a bursting scented vibrancy
    Lingering
    Happening
    Almost
    Ready

    A slow stretching yawn reverberates
    It dissipates and grows
    Permeates
    Percolates
    Rushes outward
    But
    Waits

    Sleepily cracking an eye
    It peers around
    Secretly shaking off blankets
    Dabbles a toe in the air
    Testing the sun

    If you wait, listen to the stillness
    You can hear rising sap
    Drawing deep upward to buds
    Which seem to scream a new green
    And ache for the moment of leaves

    The colours are mixing
    Designing chemicals of fluorescence
    Predicting their flourishes of blooming petals
    Teasing
    Niggling
    At the edges of their swelling
    And somnolent slumbery
    Deliberating
    On seconds
    They
    A – C – H – E
    In yellow Mimosa puffs

    Already they are dreaming
    Caught between the spurt of seed
    Dreaming of splashes fecundate
    And the tiny feet of insects
    The great call of their rainbow hues
    Is ready to set a fire
    In time to stride in their glory
    Through to summer

    But
    Wait
    The tiny buds have yet to taste
    A drop of rain
    And yet to bask for at least a day
    In golden heat
    Precipitates
    Perambulates
    Perchance to ponder
    Proliferates
    Languid time
    Wakes

    Timeless

    Spring










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