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    dots Submission Name: Dead Rosesdots
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    Author: col13x
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    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Dead Roses

    I will never buy you flowers my love

    No; those red long stem roses
    Cut before their prime
    Echo far too much of Universal bloom
    Halted
    For a mere space of wistful romance

    Flowering pride wilted in their delicate lives
    Will never express
    The pining romantic of your lips
    Even in their perfection
    Such blossoms are better left to
    Live

    I would rather see them faded
    Nurturing their seed
    And kissing promises of new bud openings
    Knowing they have paraded their beauties
    If only for a day

    No; I will never buy you roses my love

    And trade their beauty for yours
    Or even begin to compare their nimbus
    To the glory of your heart
    Or set them gathered in cold vases
    When the warmth of the earth
    Is a better place in my soul

    Dead, though they are shackled to the semblance
    Of life
    Does not portray the pounding of my heart
    With these delicacies of the eyes
    Though magnificent they are
    But needs be contrite
    If to capture your lustre they have tried

    No; my love I will not buy you flowers

    Though I love all their petaled wonders deeply
    I would rather see them
    As you
    Living freely
    And love them I do
    But I love nothing
    As well
    As I love
    You






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      I like how you depicted the rose in your poem, and how it just canít compare to how you display your love for the individual. The description on the rosesí life span when it is cut is shortened. I personally would say that if one is to give a rose it would only mean it to be temporary, love only lasting the span of the peddles that do not fall. Thought if ones love is to continue and live on why not plant a garden and build a life. The significant of that would be the display of lover whether beauty presents it self or even through hard times similar to the seasons they would have to live through before coming up again. At least thatís my partake of this writing. I have to say I did enjoy this poem.


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