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    dots Submission Name: The Fountaindots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 306
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Fountaindots
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    The Fountain

    Where have you been my love

    Did the hours slip from the pools of your thoughts
    To go wandering heights in vacant skies

    Did they capture their images on high
    As you floated through the siphoned mist of your dreams

    I stood on the golden rim

    Where comes this shimmer quiet in your eyes
    Did the blessed heavens kiss away your sadness

    Flushed you seem with a new coy brilliance
    Coquet by your demeanour disregards my question

    I drank from a sacred stream

    This sleeping softness sensual pressed to warmth
    Pervades the corners of your mouth; teasing brigands

    Have those loose moments retaliated their freedom
    And gathered the snippets of lust once again into ragged ball of passion

    I lay naked in the dust

    The tip of your finger is playing upon a pharyngeal string; my love
    Purring cat you are stretched bare skinned on a Persian rug

    Your playful whispers intone in those exquisite curves
    Flexing white porcelain opening of slow swan wings

    And I held the source spring of my heart

    Impatient now edges the tangled slides of your auburn curls
    This gesture turns your shoulder; from behind lowered lashes you look

    A predatorís toy in scratching claws lays its throat willingly bare
    Ready to be devoured by a single word; of love

    I stepped from the golden rim

    Your palms carry the visions you have seen entranced
    Coursing through your touch with eclectic imagery

    There is a moment of succumb, of slavery, in you, my love
    Relinquishing all but dignity, proud, honest, capitulation and senses devastation

    I drink from the eternal fountain















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